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Thursday, 4 June 2015

4/06/17 SM Our beautiful night sky stars


NAME: Sinead DATE: 4.06.15


SPEED WRITE: INFORMATION REPORT ON STARS

Today’s learning focus- WALT to write an information report on stars in 40 minutes.




My Information Report Success Criteria:
Self
Peer
My heading/title:


  • is an interesting title (I might have phrased the title as a question.)

My opening paragraph/introduction:


  • says what my report is about in a clear way

  • gives a general “classification” – and maybe a technical classification

  • outlines the main features of the subject

My main paragraphs/body paragraphs:


  • have clear topic sentences  (topic and main point)


  • are organised so that each paragraph is about a different aspect of the subject


  • give detailed information (factual descriptions)


  • include specific, technical vocabulary


  • are generally balanced (have a similar amount of detail about the different aspects I write about)


  • may have helpful: tables, pictures and/or diagrams to add information


My end paragraph/conclusion:


  • draws the report together/sums up my main points


  • may give a personal opinion; ask the reader a question and/or tell the reader where further information may be found












Begin Writing Here:

4/06/17 SM Our beautiful night sky stars


[Introduction]

Hi, Today I will be talking about the star’s Birth and other things! Hope you enjoy it and get to read through all of my facts or information for you. These may make you interested in stars!

[Paragraph 1 -Birth

The parents of the star is gravity! Gravity was the one who created the stars. First they start off as a cloud of gas. Gravity then starts connecting to the gas to make helium. This will carry on until the star is finally made. This carries on with the star’s lifetime!




[Paragraph 2 -Types of stars]

There are lots of different types of stars. There are the Blue star, Yellow star, Black star & the White Star. The Black, White and Yellow stars are practically a dwarf. A dwarf is a small star. Some stars have names like Rigel, Orion Hunter,Orion Nebula & Betelgeuse.



[Paragraph 3 - Appearance]

The brightest star is Sirus and the second brightest star is Canopus. Some stars are small like the black dwarf and the white dwarf. When a star is dying they start to change color into white then into dark which may seem to you it has disappeared. These stars are not always the same color because of the heat temperature. The brightest star (Sirus) Is the first star you will see!




[Conclusion]

Now I see you have read and finished it to get to here. I hope this has given you enough information to make your own report on stars! Please share the information to everyone around you and make sure you carry on searching about stars because there are more information about stars that you may not know!

2 comments:

  1. Kia ora Sinead,
    Well done on completing your speedwrite within the 40 minutes.

    Your next learning steps are:
    1) You did a lot in the 40 minutes and most of your report was well written. Make sure you always proofread your work to find mistakes (for example where you haven’t finished your sentences!)
    2) Use formal language (‘and’ instead of ‘&) and capital letters in the right places (star's birth - not star's Birth).

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  2. I like how you started saying "Hi and today i will be talking about stars" because it makes me want to read it. GREAT JOB..... Are you going to talk about something a new story of want you have learnt?

    From:Pauline

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